Saturday, May 1, 2010

Last Line Blogfest

The lovely Lilah has been so gracious to host the Last Line Blogfest.  Please check out her blog --you will not be disappointed. 

My last line may be a little cliche or dull so please excuse the roughness of it.  I'm still revising my first draft and I'm only on chapter 4 in my revisions (this is from chapter 33). The flower picture really has no purpose.



“So what do we do now?” I said, wrapping my arms around him.



“We go out into the real world and live. Do whatever we want. Well,we have to behave." He flashed me a playful smirk. "We have to check back in here once a month but that is a small price to pay to be together. Don’t you think?”

His fingers swirled on my back as he pulled me closer to him. “You did it, Anna. I told you, you could.”


I smiled as he leaned in to kiss me.

Danger still lurked for me in every shadow and how I would be able to live in the real world with my new life was still in question but I had him to guide me through it.
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Yikes. There you go. Have a great weekend!

23 comments:

  1. The flower is beautiful so I'm glad you put it up here. :) I don't know what danger is lurking out there for Anna, but I'm glad she got a happy ending.

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  2. The wording at the very end of the last sentence is awkward. But like you said, not edited. I like how the whole piece ends though. Leaves it open for more to happen in their lives, but closes the story. Again, I need more of your WiP! Must read more.

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  3. I love the happy ending! I'm intrigued - what dangers lurk in the shadows and why do they have to check in once a month? Sounds like my kind of book. :)

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  4. Ooooh I love this!!! And I'm glad she got the happy ending too :) Really great job Christine!

    I'm very curious about those dangers now.

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  5. I like it, it's very satisfying. It has a "happily ever after" feel to it.

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  6. I love Happily Ever After. Nice job.

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  7. I agree with Amie, I love that this closes a story (our questions about the danger are simply because we haven't read the stuff before) but leaves it open to further adventures if you feel so inclined.

    This is a *sigh* ending for me, which I like the best. I like the satisfied endings. this one is great because it is realistic. She gets the guy, but there are still challenges waiting in "the real world"

    Very nice!

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  8. It has a happy ending feel, with the reality that there will be challenges. I really like it. Even with just the few words I read, it fits.

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  9. Great last line - not sure if you're planning for a sequel to this MS but if so, it leaves the door open beautifully for it!

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  10. i'm intriged. need to read more.

    i played along on my blog.

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  11. This sounds like a true ending! I hope it all goes well for them. Well written.

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  12. This is a nice, feel good, ending. I liked it. Good work.

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  13. I love happy endings! Great job! And like Talli said, it leaves enough open for a sequel. :)

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  14. Spectacular job, Christine! I hate happily ever afters. but I adore happy endings with a question mark. And dangers lurking in every shadow constitute a substantial question mark. Plus, now that she has this new life, I want to know what the old life was all about. :)

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  15. The flower does serve a purpose. Beauty always does. But different for each visitor who views it.

    I love your happy ending. You want to know a secret? Authors who give readers a good happy ending get repeat customers for their next book. That's why I stay away from books and novels who blare "based on a true story!" True stories rarely end happily, and if I'm going to invest hours into a book, I want a return of a good feeling when I close the volume, Roland

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  16. I think that was great and I don't think it was cliche at all. It was fun, and I want more. Thank you so much for participating. (I like that you said the flower had no purpose, it made me laugh.)

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  17. Made me worry for her...what was she hiding from, will they weather it...etc. Drew me in, great job.

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  18. How cute. I don't think I know how to write a happy ending. The endings to all three of my novels - it a trilogy - is set up for the next novel.

    I like how this felt like a true end, but left room for a sequel if you're of a mind.

    Nicely done.

    ..........dhole

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  19. I like how you've left it slightly hanging here. It's definitely cause for a sequel. I'm very interested to know exactly what happened to her. Great!

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  20. It must feel amazing to be at "The End". :)

    I agree with everyone - like the satisfaction of happy endings, but also how it's not all tied up neatly with a bow. Nicely done :)

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  21. Oh yay! I agree, I love happy endings that accept life can't always be happy. There's still an element of danger and uncertainty. I like :~)

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  22. What a beautiful way to end it Christine... beautiful as always!

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  23. I liked it :) I liked how she had found someone safe, even though it's obvious her world isn't safe.

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