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Here is my entry for the Let's Talk Blogfest hosted by the amazing and lovely Roni from Fiction Groupie. You must --I repeat-- must check out her site and participate in the Beta Club. I had a whole other entry but in the end it didn't sound right so here is another from my WiP. I hope this one counts. To keep it short, I threw you into the scene. Anna's friend Bryn just got finished telling her about a new student. That's all I'm saying.
“What?” I looked over at Ivy. She was staring at the locker next to mine. I turned to see what they were looking at. It was the new guy turning his lock.
He looked at me and his eyes locked onto mine. They were so enticing, ice blue and piercing through me. I have one rule until I get to know someone—I never look at them in the eyes. I thought it was the window to the soul and I always felt vulnerable. Superstitious I guess but it's a rule of mine and here I was staring right back at him.
“Hi,” he said softly as one of his blonde locks fell over his forehead. His cologne tickled my nose leaving a light, sweet scent.
I stood there frozen not knowing what to do next. A pit began forming in my stomach and tingles ran down my spine. I hugged my books, bending the pages in my nervous stupor. My heart pounded as my face heated up.
“Stare much?” Veronica said, squinting at me. I didn’t see her slither up next to him. I guess she claimed him already as part of her royal court.
“Don’t worry, Ian, they’re just the freaks. Just ignore them.”
“That’s not what you said when we were together under the bleachers.” Bryn piped in.
“Really, you're still holding on to that? That was like umpteen years ago. Get over it Bryn.”
Bryn crossed his arms. “I hope Cord knows you're looking for replacements.”
“I was welcoming our new student, who for your information, was introduced to Cord in the parking lot before school,” she said putting her hand on her hip.
“Whatever,” Bryn rebutted.
The second bell rang and Ian shut his locker.
“Ian, Let’s get you to class.” Veronica eyes laid their grasp back onto me.
They slowly walked away and Ian did something that seemed odd. He rolled his eyes at her. Obviously, he didn’t know the power of her royal highness. She didn’t catch it because she was too busy flaunting her pearly whites and flinging her long sandy blonde hair.
“I’ll see you guys in history,” Bryn mumbled and ran off down the hall.
“Wow. What a hottie, huh?” Ivy said. “I think he likes you.”
“What? How did you get that from the two seconds we were together?”
“Anna, that boy looked at you with warm, bedroom eyes. He likes you.”
My eyes bulged at her absurd comment. “No, he doesn’t. I don’t even know him.”
“How did you feel when you two were having a staring contest? Warm and tingly?”
My face turned bright red. She was right but how and why? I don’t know him.
“Do you read minds now?” I squinted.
“No, I know you too well.”
I held my breath watching Veronica and Ian make their way down the hall.
She tilted her head towards my ear. “Fine, don’t believe me but when they turn the corner…if he looks at you… that means he likes you or at least interested.”
We stood there watching and waiting to see as the masses scattered to find their class room. My heart beat harder waiting for the answer. Why was I even concerned about this? Ivy’s out of her mind.
They rounded the corner and as they did his eyes caught mine and a smile snuck up his cheek.
I felt like having a heart attack on the spot.
Ivy lightly punched my arm. “I told you so.”
“That means nothing. We need to get to class.” I started walking. “Do I look fat? I think I gained a few pounds.” I tried to check my butt in the reflection of the trophy case.
“Don’t change the subject. Just face the fact that a guy likes you other than Bryn. It’s a good thing.”
“I don’t need a relationship right now.” I rolled my eyes at her.
“Have you been witnessing my life over the past year? It’s not the healthiest.”
“Then that’s why you need something more normal,” She smiled.
It was true, I did need something more normal but was this ‘the normal’ I was seeking.
I apologize for the roughness of it. I'm still revising. Maybe that was longer than I thought --sorry.
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