Saturday, December 18, 2010

Francine's Twisted Christmas Fairytale Blogfest

So, I didn't get too far on my entry. I'm so embarrassed. Please go here for all the other entries. I decided to just post what I have so far. Lame, I know. This may develop into a new idea for me. I took Sleeping Beauty and Beauty and the Beast added a YA feel. I hope to finish it, and when I do I'll post it. In the meantime, here is all I got. *hides in the corner*

Blind Beauty

I ran my hands over the buttons, trying to feel for the double lines. The message I received two days ago was the most frightening yet. After adjusting my earbuds, the message started. Static at first, then a deep computerized voice, “You will sleep forever, if your true love doesn’t kiss you by midnight on your 17th birthday.” Chills ran down my spine…today's my 17th birthday. The school bell drowned out the message, indicating the time was three.




Feet shuffling, students whispering, chairs sliding, surrounded me. I reached down for my cane; the only thing to help me see. My lifeline after the ‘accident’, at least that was the ruling. Two years have passed, and Gwen Stuben still roams these halls free. She claims the acid we used for Chem. Lab simply slipped from her fingers, landing on my eyes. If you ask me, she performed some sort of spell because the glass jar seemed to float into the air, almost hovering, before it dumped on my face. I’ve been told the skin looks like craters with cloudy globes for my eyes. Freakish. Needless to say no one would want to ask me out, hence my worry to try and find the love of my life today. If I have not found that person yet, then…I shook my head as the warm air tickled my skin as I made my way through the doors.


I waived my cane back and forth till I hit the bench. Hands grabbed my bag, pullling it off my arms. I twisted around then fell. Wicked cackles stung my ears.


"That's for making him break up with me." Gwen sharp words slapped me.


"I didn't do..." The coarse sidewalk scraped my fingertips as I patted it, looking for my cane. A loud snap made me stop.


"Try and find your way now." A stick hit my face. Gwen's stomps faded. Warm, tears came down my cheeks. What did I do to her?

Another set of footsteps approached.  "Rose, let me help you." Ryland's sweet voice ceased my tears.

Okay, so that's what I got, sorry for the unfinished entry. Please check out the other entries because they will rock.

Thanks Francine.

Have a wonderful weekend! I'll be checking out the other entries.






12 comments:

  1. well that's a great cliff hanger. Brilliant start.

    I do find white writing on dark backgrounds really kills my eyes, though. Gives me an awful after image. So apologies if I neglect to post here, regularly. :O)

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  2. Nice work Christine. It may be unfinished but my mind is filling in so many possibilities.
    Nancy
    N. R. Williams, fantasy author

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  3. I wanted to know what comes next...

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  4. It's a good start and I look forward to the rest.

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  5. Interesting start to a story--I want to know what happens!

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  6. This is super cute :) I love the premise. My only suggestion for improvement is perhaps weaving in that chunk about the cane, being blind, and what Gwen did into the dialogue. Good writing, though! Thanks for sharing! I'm interested in reading more, if you ever write more.

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  7. Great start, would like to read the rest when it's finished.


    Michael

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  8. Great start and love the idea for a YA! Look forward to reading more! ;)

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  9. Mine ended up at about 1500 words. I knew I was going over, but that how I write. So I had to do some serious cutting to fit the blogfest.

    At least you got a start here. And it sounds like an interesting story concept. I hope you do take some time to develop it.

    ........dhole

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  10. Wonderful Christine! Though you know how much I adore your writing!! I loved when I participated in the blog fest of the twisted fairytale but I don't know if I'd be able to do another one! Job well done!

    Just a reminder! Be Jolly By Golly Blog fest is this Monday! Melissa and I look forward to reading your entry!

    Jen/Jules
    Unedited & Jules and the Stars

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  11. What you did was great and allows for many possibilities...

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  12. ...me loves a juicy cliffhanger:)

    EL

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