Monday, January 2, 2012

Frankie's 3rd Annual No Kiss Blogfest

Thanks to the lovely and talented Frankie for hosting the 3rd Annual No Kiss Blogfest. Go check out her blog for the other participants. Below is my excerpt. Let me just say, I had another piece ready to go and this popped into my head. Sorry for the length. I got a vision and wrote it so it may require more work. Enough blabbing. *cringing* *holding my breath* Here it is:

I’m trying to focus on the dark road ahead searching for a sign of life. Unfortunately, we broke down on the most isolated road in the universe. Thanks to my less than worthy boyfriend, Alex, who I’m hoping is feeling the wrath of the eight beers he chugged in an hour chasing it with five shots of vodka, left me, as usual, on my own to get home.
“I’m sorry Gwen. My car is such a piece of crap.” Geoff rubs his temple and holds up his cell. The little bar in the corner of the screen still reads no service.
“Let it go. Someone’s bound to drive by and we’ll be saved.” I tap his arm with my elbow, keeping things light. “Maybe we should’ve stayed with the car. It might’ve been warmer.”
He clears his throat and pulls his zipper up to his neck. “I think there’s a gas station somewhere up here.” His words shake, making me wonder if he’s cold or nervous. I glance over. The moonlight casts a white glow around the top of his hoodie. He looks behind him then ahead of us.
“Are you okay?” He’s now making me nervous because nothing ever bothers Geoff. In the six years I’ve known him; he’s calm, quiet, and brushes off confrontation with ease. When we’d hang out in Crooked Tree Forest before I met Alex, he was the one who calmed me down, telling me fear is only a product of our minds.  
A wet drop slides down my cheek, then another hits my head. Rain. Fabulous. In a matter of seconds, rain pours down like someone turned on a faucet full blast. Geoff tugs my arm and we run. He points to something up ahead. I focus between the raindrops and darkness. A silhouette of a building comes into view, but its dark, no light means unoccupied. He pushes the door open and we rush inside. Dust and mold smell takes over the rain hitting asphalt. I cough and push my wet hair from my face.
“I guess the gas station went out of business.” I chatter trying not to fall as each step I take crunches on broken glass and trash. “Geoff? Where are you?” I search the darkness.
“Right here.” His reluctant voice comes from my right as his hand slips into mine. A warm rush twists in my chest and travels to my stomach. “You’re cold.” His breath grazes my cheek, leaving a tingle flow down my neck.
“A little,” I whisper. My heart thumps in my chest. We’ve had these moments before. Those little ones where you let a feeling go beyond where it should be. Nothing ever happens, we get caught up in one of those stares that leave me with a warm giddy feeling and wondering what would happen if we kissed. Then I think of Alex and pull away, but tonight feels a little different. Geoff seems different. The air around him is sending a mixture of nerves, warmth, and confidence.
The spice his shampoo radiates between us and his lips brush the tip of my nose. His arm slips around me, drawing me into him, making my brain go silent. I can’t think of what to do. There’s nothing but short breaths and electric tension creating fiery goose bumps to rise on my skin. I can’t see him, but every touch is amplified. His fingers trace my face and his lips barely sweep mine. I melt into him, waiting for our lips to fully touch to take my whole heart, leaving any feeling of Alex behind.
A whistle and a rumble come from above along with a high pitched sucking noise. Geoff's fingers squeeze me tighter. The roof blows off and rain pelts my face as I watch Geoff fly up to the sky.   

*letting out my breath* There it is. Hope I didn't bore you. Thanks for reading and stay tuned for giveaway info tomorrow. Now go check out the other awesome entries.

Have a great day!

31 comments:

  1. And you're going to end it there? That's not fair.

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  2. Whaa?? No, no, no. You can't stop right in the middle. I have so many questions. LOL, great job Christine. Did he really fly off?

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  3. Oh really like this! Romance, intrigue,mystery. It has it all!

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  4. WHAT! Was so not expecting that ending! Nicely done, I'm such a sucker for getting stuck in a rainstorm. Really liked this!

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  5. WHOA. whoa whoa whoa. Did you just have the romantic lead sucked up into a tornado?! That is AWESOME/crazy! Great job with grounding us in the moment and giving us so much tension between them.

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  6. Wow, such a surprise ending! I loved the tension between the two of them!

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  7. Where did he go?? High tension and deep emotion. Very nice.

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  8. Tornado strike? That's one way to interrupt a kiss. Ouch!

    Well done.

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  9. Gah! Where did he go?! Great scene!

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  10. This was far from boring! I was hooked from beginning to end and I kinda wish it was a little longer. Hmm. I wonder where Geoff went?

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  11. I loved the leading sentance "but tonight feels a little different!" And I agree with all of the above, it was never boring, excellent exit.

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  12. Great scene! He needs to come back...

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  13. Wow! Wasn't expecting that ending! Nicely done, Christine.

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  14. That was great! What an ending! :)

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  15. Thanks guys. I will be getting around to the other entries soon. You'd be surprised what I was actually thinking he got sucked up into. :) Oh my brain.

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  16. how could we be bored when he's sucked away?! That is not boring at all!

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  17. Alright; I'm hooked. I knew they couldn't kiss, but for a moment I was sure you'd break the rule.

    ......dhole

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  18. Wow, I did not see the sci-fi(?) twist coming, I hope this develops into something more as I want to see where it goes. Or more specifically where he goes.

    -Aaron

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  19. What a place to leave us! Tornedo? Angel? Batman? oh, my, what? This scene has great atmosphere and tension.

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  20. That was most definitely a surprise ending! Great job on the descriptions.

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  21. Wait - he flew off?! I so want to read more - that is a major cliff hanger. Well done!

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  22. That was lovely. My favorite part was: "We’ve had these moments before. Those little ones where you let a feeling go beyond where it should be. Nothing ever happens, we get caught up in one of those stares that leave me with a warm giddy feeling and wondering what would happen if we kissed." SO beautiful.

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  23. What? No!!! Great piece, Christine. Dang, I wanted 'em to kiss.

    ~ that rebel, Olivia

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  24. He flew away! No way! Not uh! I demand more.. *waits patiently*
    :D Good job.

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  25. WHAT!??? OMG I gasped out loud. It would have been a perfect kiss! LOL. Great job, I'm glad you decided to post this! :)

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  26. Wow, seems like Alex would have had alcohol poisoning after drinking all that in only 1 hour... makes me sick just thinking about it :)

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  27. Ahh I could just imagine this in my mind and I am not satisfied yet! That's the trouble with almost-kisses...you think it's going to happen and then it doesn't. Still, a great piece of writing! I like the build-up of tension towards the end.

    ~TRA

    The Red Angel Blog

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  28. I did not expect that ending. I'd love to know what happens next.

    Great job.

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